Revising Your Story
-copies of your narratives
-paper to write on
-lists of words for writing
Revision is necessary to improve and enrich the narrative that you are writing.
We are starting the process of polishing your writing so it shines in the reader's eye.
Steps for today's work:
1) Decide which paper you want to revise and make publishable
2) Read through the paper to get the feel of it.
3) Identify in your paper the parts from the checklist. How well do you succeed with those checklist points? Honesty with yourself is key to improvement. High quality is what is expected so look for ways to create that quality.
4) Ask others for their opinions. How you expect some part of your writing to be understood may be different for the reader.
5) Expect to change and revise most of what you wrote.
-narrative story to revise
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Typing and Revising
The purpose of narrative writing is to show readers what happened at a particular time and place. A narrative is a story--a real or an imagined event--that relies on specific details to answer the following questions:
Showing, not Telling
Revision of 1st sentence
Running through the front door, I shoved my report card in front of mom while jumping up and down and yelled, "I did it! I brought my grades up!!"
When I showed the card to my mother, she was very excited to see the one good grade. She gave me a hug and a kiss and, best of all, a bigger allowance.
My mother answered it, listened, and then looked at me with blood in her eyes. She told me that there were some things much worse than failing, and that cheating was one of them. I tried to argue. I said that she was the one who had told me to change my grades.
Revision of 2nd sentence
Smiling at me, she wrapped my in a bear hug, loudly kissed by cheek, and whispered through her tears, "I knew you could do it. I am so proud of you!"
Looking over the back of the worn out couch where she was hiding from reality, she growled, "Don't slam the door! And it's about time you got a good grade!!"